Deniz YEŞİLYURT
City Life and
Country Life
People have the different lifestyles which are city lifestyle and country lifestyle. City and country lifestyles are similar in that the people's aims are to maintain their lives according to certain criterions. However, city life and country
life have differences. Five important differences between city life and country
life are job opportunities, opportunities of education, cost of living,
environment and entertainment.
To
begin with, it is clear that job opportunity is one of the differences between
city life and country life. City has much more job opportunities. People in the
city have many chances to find a job as food, textile and construction
industries have developed. In the country, there are fundamental jobs. Unlike
people in the city, people who live in the country can make a living with
agriculture and livestock. Nowadays, areas of business are narrowing because of
some reasons such as fragmentation land through inheritance, decreasing productivity
in agricultural production, mechanization in agriculture. Therefore, people migrate
to city where alternative job opportunities have.
Secondly, city differs from country in that city has more opportunities
of education. Generally, schools in the city
have modern technology such as computers, smart board. Also, there are a lot of
options to get a better education such as special schools or courses. Therefore,
education level is higher. In contrast, level of education is lower due to lack
of school in the country. The cause of this is not only lacking of school but
also lacking of equipment and teachers. For example, students in the country
have to study the same class even though their grades are different. The reason
is deficiency of teachers and classes.
Thirdly, city and country are different in that cost of living in the
city is higher while it is lower in the country. For example, people in the
city have to pay much money for housing, food, beverage and clothing. Unlike
people in the city, people who live in the country pay less money. For example,
they have their own houses. They can cultivate fruit and vegetables. They need not pay much money for basic needs.
The
next difference between city and country is the environment. As there is no traffic, no noise, natural
beauties and clean air in the country affect people positively. People in the
country can go to the forest which is relaxing for people when they are bored.
Even though fascinating things of country, some people do not prefer living in
a country. As they are accustomed to
city, they feel bored in there. Unlike country, buildings which are built by
cutting the trees are suffocating for people in the city. When they want to walk or see green areas,
they do not find anywhere. At the same time, noise and air pollutions have
negative effects on people.
Lastly,
city life and country life are different from each other in terms of
entertainment. While facilities of entertainment are limited in the country,
there is no limitation in the city. There are a lot of different activities in
the city. For example, when you feel bored in the city, you can go to the
cinema or theatre. You can find a lot of places to spend time with your friend
such as café, shopping malls. Unlike city, there are not many places where to
go and what to do in the country. Generally, children in the country play traditional
children’s games such as hide and seek, jump rope, skipping stones in order to
have fun.
To
summarize, city life and country life have advantages and disadvantages.
Consequently, city and country lifestyle are different from each other in terms
of job opportunities, opportunities of education, cost of living, environment
and entertainment. While city has unlimited job opportunities, in the country
they are limited. In the city, level of education is higher, but in the country
it is lower. Unlike country life, cost of living is higher. While the
environment is clear and relaxing in the country, it is stupefying in the city.
City has different types of activities, but country does not have. In my
opinion, living in a city is better than living in a country.
1) For example, students in the country have to study (missing prep.) the same class even though their grades are different.
ReplyDelete2) Even though fascinating things of country, (revise grammar structure)
3) they do not find anywhere. (it is true to use modal instead of auxiliary verb "do")
4) there are not many places ( where)(it is unnecessary ) to go and(you may add here "anything" so you can delete "what" ) to do in the country.
GOOD WORK
1-) People have the different lifestyles.(Paragraph 1-line 1) Wrong article usage.We do not know those different lifestyles, so you should omit "the" article.
ReplyDelete2-) city life and country life (paragraph 1, line 3) -> Article is missing.
3-) environment and entertainment.(paragraph 1,line 5) -> you need a comma before "and" conjunction as the following word is a different term.
4-) City has much more job opportunities. (Paragraph 2,line 2) -> article is missing.You need to write "a city" or "the city" article before . To me, you need to make it plural, then it would be more general. "Cities" make more sense to me.
5-) In the country, there are fundamental jobs. (paragraph 2, line 4) -> Country should be plural. In fact, it would be great if you change "city" and "country" expressions to plural, then it would be more general.
6-) fragmentation land through inheritance(paragraph 2, line 5) -> (Word order mistake) -> land fragmentation through inheritance
7-) people migrate to city where alternative job opportunities have. (paragraph 2, line 8) -> "have" is used wrongly. You may write " can be found" there.
8-) Generally, schools in the city have modern technology such as computers, smart board.( paragraph 1, line 2) -> You used "computers" as a plural form, then you should also use "smart board" as a plural form.
9-) there are a lot of options to get a better education( paragraph 3, line 3) -> "education" is uncountable, so you should not use "a" article there.
10-) Therefore, education level is higher. (paragraph 3, line 4) -> article is missing. You need to write "the education level" there. Actually, it would be better if you expand that sentence.
My opinion : Writing about the country and the city life is simple. You are expected to write much more sophisticated essays than than one. People should be willing to read your essay as there would be some benefit of doing it. Almost everybody knows the differences of the city and the country life.
7-) people migrate to city where alternative job opportunities have. (paragraph 2, line 8) -> "have" is used wrongly. You may write " can be found" there. ---> I disagree that there is a mistake.
ReplyDeleteWriting about the country and the city life can be simple or everybody can know the differences of the city and the country life. Also, many people know the differences of Japanese and Chinese.